The orange face is over the top. Whites of the eyes should not have that color cast.
Find a quality reference image with similar composition and compare them while making changes. Teal shadows will create the perception of orange in highlights. You don't have to push them. But regardless, skintones should be perceived as natural in the context of the grade. That's where this fails.
Think about the mood the image should evoke, and research techniques to achieve it. Neither the action, composition or grade tell me what this image is saying. It's as blank as his expression.